Considering your age and thus your experience you are doing quite well on drums. The beat is steady and on the point. I like it.
But try to count your breaks/fills.
Go ahead and play the song without any distortion, spoken vocals and about 40% slower and low energy for practice, count.
The music is ok so far, could be a little more surprising (dynamics/parts/halftimes) for my taste ..
Check recording position, too much cymbals in it, the snare is cool